At any rate, aside from mass panic about ADT in general, I've started really trying to nail these two ideas, starting with the birds — mostly because that's more solid than the personal/safari one so far...
The first thing I had to do was get the damn style frames sorted — I'd been having tremendous difficulty pegging the colours and such as seen in my last posts, so I took on board what Ed had mentioned about colours and using the white for the telegraph poles and tried to come up with something a bit less ugly. I still think it's bad... but hopefully it's getting there. My concern is that it still doesn't look like an E4 ident?! Something about the colours still seems off to me. Then again, the idea does too. Just... everything. Ugh.
Maybe the colours still need to be darker. I've kept in the gradient but really toned it down — hopefully it's an improvement. I dunno.
Playing around with the composition of the shots too. The characters are really stiff and lifeless which doesn't help but I found myself geting really worked up and worried about which birds I should use... then I worried about the angle of the wires. I quite like the skewed close-up one but this makes the whole giant E4 landing on the wires thing kind of difficult.
I quite like the two smaller birds as there's room for them to really bounce but I dunno if it really works. Are they too similar in shape? I half feel I should stick with the fatter bird, just because it might work better as an idea if he's huge and fat which causes the wire to bounce around. I don't know.
I found I was really having difficulty imagining the characters moving — hence the little doodles all over the page and countless more in my sketchbook trying to figure out how they'd look in motion. I think that's why I'm having such difficulty... I just can't see these moving, for some reason. What a crap animator I am.
MORE STORYBOARDS. My previous ones were really just to illustrate the rough flow — these are still super-crude but I tried to pay a bit more attention to the sequencing of the bounces etc, with the intention of sticking these into a rough animatic a bit later. Again I still found I was having REAL difficulty to imagine the bouncing... it's quite tricky to time, but for some reason I just couldn't seem to visualise the action. Here the small bird juts kind of flies in, lands and wobbles, then makes a little cheep. The other one doesn't respond. He tries again (supposed to be a bit bigger but I screwed it up) and the other one then suddenly cuts in. Cue alternate bouncing, getting faster and faster until BOOM giant E4 comes springing along.
Pretty much the same thing, just with a different composition and a fatter bird. I think it kind of works in terms of composition but I'm not sure about it. It's easy enough to change, I suppose. Part of me still really likes this composition. There's less negative space but maybe it's too close.
AGAIN, same, just slightly different angle and trying to think about what actually happens to the two after the E4 comes in. I thought maybe they kind of got pulled down and then flung up into the air as it bounces up but I dunno if that makes much sense. OH WELL.
Last little storyboard is kind of a mix. I still don't like the straight wire but again, it's pretty easy to change I guess! I opted for the smaller bird in this version just to see how it works. It seems to give more space for the E4 to come in but part of me is still more attracted to the fatter bird.
Also added a little bit at the end where the giant E4 kind of... poops off the wire as a little send off. It's stupid, but I was tired and stressed and worrying and I needed to amuse myself with something.
SO anyway, after that I started stringing together some animatics. They are atrocious and I hate them and they suck. But oh well. It's a start...
V3
"first" version (actually V3 due to my annoying SAVE EVERY TIME I MAKE A SMALL CHANGE habit) is... eh. I hate it. The timing is kinda sorta working but I'm not too hot on it — especially the intro. I think more sound will help — I also don't think there are quite enough frames (or I picked the wrong ones) to tell the action properly. He's supposed to fly in, pause for a split second before dropping onto the wire and wobbling. As it is he kind of just sits there weirdly. Shoulda picked better panels. Or add some more. But oh well.
I don't think the bouncing is working that well... it's really quite difficult to peg using static images. I think I really need to cut the characters out and get them moving properly in After Effects but at this point I was just trying to kind of see whether it would fit within the timeframe.
The ending is almost there. It seems to be working, but I dunno. Doesn't seem like much of a pay off. Maybe the birds just need to be more frantic instead of getting higher. Also the sound — it just seems... lacking. Somehow.
V4
I switched up a few of the timings (mostly when the white bird cuts in, trying to make it feel a bit more like he's coming in quicker rather than waiting for the purple one to finish) and got rid of that horrible boing effect.
Still not sold on it. Just doesn't really... go anywhere. I think maybe the stretch downwards is a bit long. Kind of needs to be sudden... but again, bad panel choice maybe. Should just kind of drop and then hold at the bottom, then PING. I think maybe some sound will help as well, so maybe have some sort of indication that something's coming even whilst they're bouncing. I did try a whistle but it sounded... really, really weird. Ho ho.
V5
Ugh, okay so I tried to fix it and I think I made it even worse. I think I was panicking again and made some really dodgy decisions — the fly at the beginning is REALLY weirdly timed but I think the wobble sound effect, though dodgy, kind of helps. I also tried to give the white bird a bit more to do, having him turn away after the purple bird lands, but I think it's ust gotten too busy and makes no sense. That's the issue — too much going on! There'll be time to animate him later. I think I'm just worrying and trying to animate before I know what I'm animating.
I think I just need to roll back to square one and try again — delete what I have so far and just start from scratch. I'm getting too wrapped up in what I've got here already which is confusing me massively.
I definitely need to give a bit of time to the Safari idea but this blog has actually helped. I can see how it's not working now, kinda, and hopefully I'll be able to fix it. I have some rough storyboards for the safari one — not too pleased with it but I'm going to crack on with my little birdies for the time being and just try to get something solid in static images before I start cutting them out and moving them around. I really just need to get the timing right...